Reflection
Part I:
The Scarlet Letter Reflection:
During the period of time I wrote my Scarlet Letter essay, examples of scapegoating someone was apparent in our society. Political figures were being blamed for other's mistakes, such as the Attorney General Alberto Gonzalez. He was blamed for the actions that he could not control of people under him and his name was slandered by the media and Congress. That situation related to what Hawthorne showed through the character of Hester in the Scarlet Letter. I was attempting to see how well I could prove that the main theme of the book was to show how society creates scapegoats. America creates scapegoats at an alarming pace and it is very possible for you to be one at some point in your life. I learned that through writing and analyzing a book you recently read you can discover aspects of the book that were previously unknown to you, and also develop ideas and thoughts about different themes the author was aiming for. I basically did no brainstorming, charts, or diagrams, but I rather just tried to type my thoughts as fast as I was thinking them, which is where I believe I excel. I have learned through this class that "over-planning" an essay can restrict your creativity and stick to boring sentences with not much in it other than cold, hard facts. I also learned that if I am trying to talk in active voice, I have to make sure I stick to it or it can ruin an otherwise good essay.
Nature Essay Reflection:
In my essay on nature and transcendentalism, I struggled because the concept and beliefs of transcendentalism are so hard to find in these modern days. All around us we see woods and forests being torn down and being replaced with businesses, homes, and roads. We do not seem to be attempting to find answers and knowledge through viewing nature, because we are tearing it down and trampling on its sacred grounds. Through these examples I tried to portray how transcendentalism is a concept hard to relate to and discover in these times. After analyzing transcendentalism, I realized that I agree with almost all of the aspects of it. But I realized I was being a bit hypocritical because I have been somewhat responsible for the destruction of nature, however small, when my family moved into a house that was previously wooded and apart from man, but during the development of the neighborhood the trees, bushes, and underbrush were cut down and replaced with paved roads, houses, and street lights. I did no brainstorming or diagrams of any sort because I honestly couldn't; the topic at hand was not one I would to a good job elaborating on it, so I hoped to express my views on transcendentalism and just do what was required of me. I have learned from this essay that I should try to be as creative as possible with my writing, even in situations where I can't seem to find a way to make a decent point. I also learned from this that researching the topic at hand creates doors of opportunity for your writing, because the more you know the more you can speak about. It's a simplistic idea, but it worked very well for me.
Part II:
I started my revision process on my Scarlet Letter essay by going back and correcting any grammatical errors she noticed and easily fixed them. After that, I painstakingly went through the essay and corrected the parts where I was not talking in active voice, which took awhile because at first I didn't grasp the concept at first and had a hard time locating where I did this. But after I finished my revision, I noticed Mrs. Turner was right and that it improved my essay dramatically by just making a few corrections and filling in the holes. I can't link you to where I edited what I fixed because it has already been fixed, but the results are noticeable in the essays. During my nature essay I began to repeat myself in a negative way, not emphasizing key points but rather basically word for word repetition because I was running out of things to say. With Mrs. Turner's help I managed to cut out excess and unneeded sentences from my nature essay that were serving as distractions in the essay. I also went back in each piece and edited certain words that had been repeated and could just as easily with something that meant practically the exact same thing, such as "persistence" and "determination" in my Scarlet Letter essay.
Part III:
After reading Luke Mosteller's nature essay, I learned that his style of writing may be something that I could learn from. He smoothly transitions from first person to talking about the topic at hand in third person, which helps the essay dramatically. Usually when I try to do this, people notice it and tell me to correct it, but in Luke's case, it seems to help his essay. Luke's Essay
After completing Shyniqua's roller-blading essay, it wasn't hard to realize how different our styles were. She used comedy and satirical comments to build her essay, while I just stuck to facts and elaboration. While it would be tough for me to match her skills in writing a comedy, which is what it basically was, it made me realize that if I interjected humor, satire, and irony, it would make me a much better writer. Meshing comedy and factual writing in my opinion is extremely tough to do and would take me a long time to master, but I can now use Shyniqua's essay as a guide for that very purpose. Shyniqua's Essay
After reading and finishing laughing at Cauley's nature essay, I couldn't help but think how well she was able to add so much comedy in her writing and still manage to stay on topic. Reading this helped teach me how pure comedy in an essay and not much else can be a great way to entertain and humor your audience and put things in a different perspective. I was impressed with her similes and adjectives, such as "beastly hot" and the line about the samurai ninja. This helped show me the creativity and independence you can use when adding different aspects to your paper such as similes, metaphors, and personification. I had never seen an essay written quite like this, and I was overall impressed with the quality. Cauley's Essay